Kia ora,
Today were learning how to fix the surface features. We had to fix our writing if too many word were the same.
On our Room 9 writing site teacher put on a link to a story we needed to fix. We made a our own copy. We had to read it once and find the end of the sentences. One of the words We highlighted was "he" then I changed the for name of the colours.
This is what I have done.
He kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder he tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed he was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the knife in his hand stormed around the house.
Mum has had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us. Maybe he was one of them looking for revenge but why would he come? Mum would just move.
how did he find us we live on the other side of the planet from where all of mum’s boyfriends were. So how could he find us? He might have put a tracker on mum when he last saw her or on one of her devise.
“Hello where are you? I know you're here, you're going to tell me where your mother is or you shall join your father... in the skies. So which will it be, death or freedom! You have 10 seconds to choose wisely’.
Can you fix the surface features?
